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Where There's a Will ,There's a way

  • 作者: 笨笨平
  • 来源: 未知
  • 发表于2016-08-22 18:15
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  • When I was around five ,I heard of this proverb "Where There's a Will ,There's a way"from my grandfather .However ,it was only through my experience in learning maths that I truly understood the meaning of it .
    There was a time when I hand to struggle for a pass in Mathematics . No matter how many exercises I did previously ,my mind always turned blank when I sat for my tests .I almost felt desperate when my teacher gave me a thought-provoking talk ,which reminded me of this proverb"Where There's a Will ,There's a way".With the encouragement from my teacher ,I put more effort in hope of achieving a good result . Surprisingly ,my dream really came true .I got a result that at last brought me a big smile.
    Ever since ,I believe if I have a strong will and a mighty heart,I will always find methods to achieve my goal.
    考生用自己学数学的亲身经历诠释了Where There's a Will ,There's a way的内涵。本文炫彩贴近学生生活,故事完整有深意。此外,本文多次使用高级句型和词汇,让人耳目一新。其他可借鉴之处如下:
    1.用there was a time when……句型交代故事背景,表达地道,语言技巧高明
    2.细节描述到位,用my mind truned blank 强调遇到的困难
    3.先试用when连接两个并列句,又用which引导的定语从句,体现了考生深厚的语法基础。thought-provoking,remind等词汇的使用提高了本文的档次。
    4.Surprisingly ,my dream really came true .I got a result that at last brought me a big smile.本句描述了在谚语的激励下,考生继续努力的过程,与上下文联系紧密,体现了很强的叙事逻辑性。
    5.I believe if I have a strong will and a mighty heart,I will always find methods to achieve my goal.别出心裁,把对该谚语的解释,放在末尾,是文章行云流水,流畅自然。Where There's a Will ,There's a way